Vis dev midterm, and 3rd enviro sketch project

So last week was my vis dev/advanced illustration midterm,

Center: my b/w value study; Bottom left: my original concept; Bottom center: my rough tonal study; Bottom right: my corrected lineart

Version 1.0~

I was so dumb, I had a version that was updated with more flowers, but I saved this one to send in :P. And in my prop, I used a flower from the newer batch :Honestly, this started out as an excuse so I could just draw Utena flowers.

Old props: note to self, never bring them to class or mention them ever again. I got so much criticism over this page because I didn't organize it and fix it. But hey! It was supposed to just show where I was and where I went. 

These are basically the notes I got from the critique:

Environment:

-change light to blue, which means shadows are warm and light is cool.

-use saturated rug version (I had two versions, the other one isn't shown here, it looked ugly)

-bags look like rocks :/. open some of the bags with loot spilling out

-trunk looks too much like a couch, probably need to change the notan a bit (my team leader suggested adding handles to the side, so I'll go with that later)

-maybe do artificial light from the lamp?

-lamp merges too much with cabinet (value-wise)

-be sure to explain the lighting, is it from the street or a ghost or something?

-do exterior environment as well so we can see Jiro's home from an exterior pov

-lighting itself has tangent with window, either move the center of the lighting or switch to another window design.

-and from my good friend: I diverted away from the style, and my color ver is too dark and doesn't follow the notan values

-and my notes: 

---maybe add some brooms and stuff for a closet feel?

-----AND most importantly, finish your bg

-------which means, finish wallpaper too

Props:

-why are the color saturations placed on the wrong emphasis? why are there tangents and overlap with the items on the page why is this standing on that? whaaat? get rid of prop 1.0

-use b/w/g as an arbitrary color, versus opera pink, bright pink or any other color can affect your color sense

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Meanwhile, in environment sketching, we were supposed to design an environment that had a clear composition (the focus being composition), and feature 2 robot characters, one large, one small.

After these super rough concept ones, I chose 1 that I wanted to do no matter what and cleaned it up with proper perspective (happened to use 2 point), then added some tone.

Lots of line details. I was really inspired by Steven Universe and the backgrounds there. I love that show so much.

A tonal lay-in (nighttime)

I did better this time. My values were good, but the robots get lost in the buildings, so my professor suggested having the large robot be a giant in the background, while the small one stays at the edge of the small pier, and maybe just get rid of the submarine because it gets confusing. That's if I want a narrative. He also said that I could just get rid of all the characters and it would work for my portfolio. Ahhh, the magic p-word, portfolio. I think I'll have it ready by the end of this semester. 

Working on characters for the story next, and sketchbook pages and stuff are coming..